Can you cut this down, way down?
“The tailored jacket provided the woman with the ability to not only look good to her fullest potential but in addition also enabled her to show off her new figure.”
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“The tailored jacket provided the woman with the ability to not only look good to her fullest potential but in addition also enabled her to show off her new figure.”
The tailored jacket showed her new figure to full advantage.
The tailored jacket enabled the woman to show off her new figure and look her best.
The tailored jacket looked good on the woman and showed off her new figure.
The tailored jacket showed the woman's new figure at its best.
The tailored jacket showed the woman, along with her new figure, to the fullest potential.
The tailored jacket showed the woman and her new figure to the fullest potential.
The tailored jacket allowed her to look her best while showing off her new figure.
She was radiant in her jacket that accented her new figure.
Now can you translate this lesson to your regular writing?
“The woman’s new figure looked gorgeous in the tailored jacket.”
That's about as regular as it gets.
The woman looked great in her tailored jacket, which allowed her to show off her new figure.
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