Criminal Sentence 512: Wearing a Bag

From a blog:

"a green baggie t-shirt"

An interesting garment! Unless this was a plastic bag, it should be "baggy."

Poll Results 121

Here was the question:

Correct or not? "The extent of death and destruction exceeded that of Dresden."

Correct	44 (62%)
Not Correct	26 (37%)

Congrats to 62% of you. The comparison here is between "extent," singular, and "that," singular. It's a match!

New Grammar Girl Episode: Commas with Adjectives

http://grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/commas-with-adjectives.aspx

Criminal Sentence 511: Money Issues

From a book I'm reading:

"They looked over rows and rows of gold bars and banknotes worth hundred of millions of dollars."

This is about the Nazis.

This sentence isn't that evil, but an "S" is missing!

Criminal Sentence 510: What's in a Name II?

An error I see a lot:

"Edgar Alan Poe"

When you see the name Poe, think Allan: two L's and 2 A's!!

Criminal Sentence 509: What's in a Name?

From the Web:

"Martha Steward Living Magazine"

Did she change her name?

Criminal Sentence 508: A Whole Other Spelling

From a book I'm reading:

"Her role was to spy, to be the quiet mouse that slowly but surely chewed a whole in the foundation of the house."

I just about spit out my snack when I read that!

Poll Results 120

The question:

Which of these is correct?

Get ahold of yourself.	10 (11%)
She traveled to afar off land.	0 (0%)
I became apart of the family.	3 (3%)
More than one is correct.	5 (5%)
All are wrong.	67 (78%)

This seemed to be a hard one. Congrats to 11% of you. The phrase "ahold of" is actually correct. I had to look it up several times just to be sure.
The incorrect items should have been like this:
a far-off land
a part of the family

Criminal Sentence 507: What Is Passive?

From a blog post about what not to do in a first paragraph:

"Passive voice. As in 'he/she was', or 'he/she had'. I'd say, as a rule, if you have 'had' or 'was' anywhere in your first paragraph (or even your first SENTENCE), take 'em out. And obviously, over-use of either throughout a manuscript is a no-no."

Overall, this is good advice, but "he/she was" and "he/she had" are not passive voice constructions. "She was kissed by the man" is passive voice. The writer meant "Don't use weak verbs."

Also, the period goes inside the quotation mark in American English.

Also, overuse is one word with no hyphen.

Janet Reid's Most Recent Contest

I summoned my inner pervert and got on the finalists' list of her contest. Woo hoo!

Criminal Sentence 506: That Sentence Needs a Haircut

From a blog post:

"the shear volume..."

No shears involved. Two "E's" should be involved: "sheer."

Criminal Sentence 505: Aaah, My Eyes!

From a blog post:

"My eyes glossed over."

My tongue hung out in disbelief (well, not really).

This is mixed up. You gloss over something when you explain something away. Your eyes glaze over when they're tired.

Criminal Sentence 504: The Difference an M Makes

From a class handout:

"Warming! This syllabus is designed to be read!"

And proofread?

Poll Results 119

Here was our question:

Is this sentence incorrect? "They crashed to the ground, taking all fourteen crew to their death."

Definitely yes	44 (48%)
Definitely no	33 (36%)
Maybe	14 (15%)

Tricky. I would go with maybe. "Deaths" sounds better, but it's not wrong to say "death." For more info on this topic, see here.

Criminal Sentence 503: Blockhead Headline

A headline in today's paper:

"Space blocks them off, but the sun does make sounds"

Don't put the cart before the horse. In other words, don't put the pronoun before its antecedent! You can't replace something that hasn't been mentioned yet!

Criminal Sentence 502: Fiction on Fire

An odd sentence from a blog post:

"Many of the books have a flare of women’s fiction in them..."

I think the writer meant "a hint of women's fiction." She probably didn't mean something that is lit.

Criminal Sentence 501: Being of the Grammatical Persuasion

From today's paper:

"Being of the male persuasion, it is hardly in my interest to make men look dumb. Or at least dumber than we are."

I won't argue with you. "Being of the male persuasion, I..."

Criminal Sentence 500: My Name Is Boring

One of my writing students had to write a one-page essay about herself and her career goals.

She began "My name is."

Criminally uninteresting! I helped her rewrite it, and it turned out very well.

Poll Results 118

The question:

How many errors, if any, does this pair of sentences contain? "Some of the girls ask her who she likes. She demures and instead directs her gaze at me."

0	9 (15%)
1	17 (29%)
2	24 (41%)
3	8 (13%)

The answer:

Error 1: Our friend "whom" is missing in the first sentence: "Some of the girls ask her whom she likes." Now, I know that "whom" is becoming unfashionable, but it does have its uses, as in "To whom it may concern."
Error 2: The verb "demures" (not a real word) should be "demurs." "To demur" means to object or take exception to something. The adjective "demure" means reserved.

Criminal Sentence 499: Un-princely Error

From an AP story about Prince Charles and the succession:

"Any legal change would not effect Prince Charles."

Does poor spelling affect the monarchy?

Criminal Sentence 498: Word Invention

A headline in today's paper (for an article about legalizing gambling at horse and dog tracks):

"Measure would legalize racinos"

Will this word be a real word in the future?

Criminal Sentence 497: Calling All Sailors

From a book:

"He swaggers back to his fellow naval-baring delinquents."

At least it didn't say "naval-bearing."

Oops!

Check out this headline!

Criminal Sentence 496: I Want to Close My Eyes

From a book:

"You kind of get sick of the site of them."

My site is my location; my sight is my ability to see.

I'm kinda sick of the sight of typos!

Poll Results 117

Here was the question:

Is something wrong here? "I stepped over the tangle of black chords on the floor."

Yes	50 (71%)
No	20 (28%)

Congrats to 71% of you. "Chords" should be "cords."

Criminal Sentence 495: Not Your Standard Sentence

From a book:

"It is your standard stationary shop."

So the shop is stationary--does not move?

Stationery--with an e--refers to paper on which you write letters. I remember that it has an e because letters contains only e's.

Criminal Sentence 494: Bear with Me

From a book I read:

"My classified ad has born fruit."

"to be born" = to come out of mama: I wasn't born yesterday.
"to bear" = to manage/deal with: I have borne many tragedies.

Criminal Sentence 493: A New Instrument

From a book I just finished:

"There were glittery girls waving, as well as an accordian player."

But was there a dictionary?

Criminal Sentence 492: This Site Make Me Complain

From a newsletter for paralegals:

Grammar Tips — Grammar is Fun

Well it should be and this site make it just that.

Maybe they should check their subject-verb agreement before they mention grammar!

Poll Results 116

Here was the question:

What's the error in this sentence called? "That's free money take advantage of it."

Comma splice	14 (21%)
Run on sentence	50 (76%)
Incomplete sentence	0 (0%)
Overly long sentence	0 (0%)
I call it just fine.	1 (1%)

I guess that was too easy. It's not a comma splice because there's no comma!

Guest Post: Verbification

This is a guest post from Daniel Koontz, author of Quick Writing Tips and Casual Kitchen:

Don't tase me bro!

Sentences like this explain why grammarians suffer.

Of course, the verb to tase is a textbook example of a verbified noun. A strict grammarian would prefer shocked by a taser or subdued by a taser instead.

Unfortunately, both substitutes are wordy and unwieldy, and neither improves upon the original. It's also questionable whether tase is even incorrect. After all, common usage allows the word gunned or knifed, both of which are examples of verbified nouns.

So what's the rule? There isn't one--at least not a clear one that shows the boundary between proper grammar and sounding like a tool. You must rely on your own ear.

Many nouns have lately been pressed into service as verbs. Not all are bad, but all are suspect.
--Strunk & White, The Elements of Style

Another Writing Blog to Investigate

Just reconnected with a friend who does a writing blog: quickwritingtips.blogspot.com. Check it out!

Criminal Sentence 491: Frequent Error

From today's newspaper (about Southwest's new frequent-flier program):

"Cashing in an award will become drastically different under the new program and will look more similar to other airlines' programs."

What exactly is this sentence comparing?

Cashing in an award

will look more similar to

other airlines' programs

Let's just scrap this icky sentence. Anyone want to try to rewrite it?

Criminal Sentence 490: Under a Proofreader's Care

During the Christmas holiday, I spent way too much time (thanks, kids) at the Natural History Museum's live bug area. I got to see two tarantula feedings. Anyway, to distract myself from seeing my daughter sidling up to a live bug, I looked for typos. Voila.

Criminal Sentence 489: Faux Fo

I am not one of them, they who don't proofread their headlines.

Poll Results 115

Here was the question:

What's wrong here? "Cave bears began to move from their old territories, according to a DNA analysis led by researchers at the Max Planck Institute in Leipzig of teeth found near the Danube River."

Spelling	0 (0%)
Misplaced Modifier	26 (78%)
Verb Use	2 (6%)
None of the Above	5 (15%)

Congrats to 78%. I hope it was obvious that this was a very awkward sentence!

Criminal Sentence 488: A The An Article Problem

From CNN:

"Stuck on a the tarmac for hours"

I guess the CNN graphics writer couldn't decide which article (a/the/an) to use.

Criminal Sentence 487: Kids Can't Eat Here

Not really a Criminal Sentence, but funny.

From my online banking list of credit card purchases:

"RESTAURANT ASS41222472"

I must have eaten at a restaurant, but it wasn't called that!

Criminal Sentence 486: That's Un-exceptable

From something I edited recently:

"The use of CO2 to clean graphite has been an excepted practice for over twenty years."

I take exception to that!

These two words sound alike but mean different things:

"accepted": related to "accept," meaning to receive with approval--We have accepted you into our club.
"excepted": related to "except," meaning anything but that--We like all of you, present company excepted.

Criminal Sentence 485: Typo or Error?

From an e-mail message:

"You could use more then one."

I used to think this was just a typo, but then someone told me she'd always thought "then" was correct. Nope! It's "than" when you're saying "more than."

Here was the question:

Is a punctuation mark incorrect here? "At Christmas, the Germans baked squares of lebkuchen, or honey cake; loaves of stollen, a sweetbread studded with raisins, and trays of pfeffernusse, peppery spice cookies coated in sugar syrup."

Yes	47 (73%)
No	17 (26%)

Congrats to 73% of you.

As you can tell, this sentence contains an overabundance of commas here. The one semicolon is lonely and needs another friend:

"At Christmas, the Germans baked squares of lebkuchen, or honey cake; loaves of stollen, a sweetbread studded with raisins; and trays of pfeffernusse, peppery spice cookies coated in sugar syrup."

Sounds yummy!

Grammar Girl Episode: Just Deserts or Just Desserts?

New episode written by yours truly!

http://grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/just-desert-or-just-dessert.aspx

Criminal Sentence 484: Digit Down

From the newspaper:

"He gave a thumb's up."

A minor quibble here: It should be "thumbs up."

Criminal Sentence 483: Joint Gymnastics

From a sign:

"Men and Women's Gymnastics"

Gymnastics doesn't work this way. The men are separate from the women. They don't share the equipment, nor do they share an apostrophe. They each need their own:

Men's and Women's Gymnastics

Criminal Sentence 482: Boys Having Babies

From a book I'm reading:

"The next day he became a grandfather when his son (BJ) gave birth to a son."

The book was not science fiction!

As far as I know, only ladies can give birth.

Double Reader Question

Here is the double question:

Only that often times I see "often times" and "life like" written as two words: "often times," "life like." I assume in such a context as "That's a lifelike doll," they're compound words, and I can't think of a way to say them as two words. Tell me if I'm wrong!

The short answer for both is that each is one word: oftentimes and lifelike.

You might consider using just the word often instead of oftentimes: fewer letters.

Poll Results 114

Here was the question:

What's the best way to rewrite this? "As the owner of your business, it is imperative that you learn about the business."

As the owner of your business, it is imperative that you learn about it. 13 (21%)
As the owner of your business, you must learn about the business. 12 (20%)
As the owner of your business, you must learn about it. 27 (45%)
No rewriting necessary. 9 (13%)

Congrats to 45% of you. The initial problem here is that "it" can't follow "As the owner of your business." "You" needs to go there. The second item to be concerned about is the repetition of the word "business." Therefore, the third choice is best.

Criminal Sentence 481: Painter or Police Officer?

From a book I'm reading:

"I'll canvas the area over there."

Oh, and this was spoken by a police officer.

To canvass, with two S's, is to inquire, as in to canvass the neighborhood by knocking door to door and asking residents questions.

Canvas, on the other hand, isn't a verb. It's a noun and it's that thing on which painters create their art. Or maybe someone is going to put canvas on that area over there.

Reader Question: Pickup vs Pick up

Carrie's question:

I have to go research pick up vs. pickup, as in "your pictures will be ready for..."

Pickup with no space is a noun, so you use that with "Your pictures will be ready for pickup." It can also be an adjective: " a pickup game of baseball"
To pick up is a verb, so you would say, "I will pick you up at 10:00."

I have covered this topic before: here, here and here.

Criminal Sentence 480: Fishy Comma

From a book I'm reading (this sentence refers to herring):

"In its fresh form, this small, silvery fish (cousin to the sardine), figured prominently in the local diet."

Hmmm. There's something fishy about that last comma! Delete! Delete!

Criminal Sentence 479: Tall Letters on a Hill

From a blog:

"They traveled to Capital hill."

That's not the place in D.C.; that's the hill where runaway tall letters are housed.

The place in D.C. is called "Capitol Hill": two caps and an O.

Poll Results 113

Here was the question:

What's wrong here? "The source of the beliefs are as important as the beliefs themselves."

Spelling	0 (0%)
Use of reflexive	2 (3%)
Verb agreement	47 (92%)
Nothing	2 (3%)

You guys are too smart!

"Source" is singular, so "are" should be "is."

Criminal Sentence 478: MISSING!

From a newspaper article:

"Unless you're running, biking or swimming, it's going to be hard to around town this weekend."

To what, that is the question!

Criminal Sentence 477: Facial-Hair Problem

From a book I read:

"...curling mustach..."

Perhaps this curling mustachE got chopped a bit too much!

Poll Results 112

Here was the question:

Do you chuckle at this or not? "Jazz Men Rice"

Ha ha	13 (41%)
Not ha ha	18 (58%)

Well, is it funny when you hear that it was supposed to be Jasmine Rice?

Criminal Sentence 476: Going back to School

From a newspaper article:

"their freshmen year"

This sentence concerns two people. Had it concerned one person, the correct phrase would have been "his/her freshman year." It's about two, so let's pluralize both words: "their freshmen years."

Criminal Sentence 475: Which Noun?

From junk mail I received:

"You currently have a $30 credit towards this service which expires 12/31/10."

Question: Does the credit or the service expire at the end of the year?

Reader Question: Subject-Verb Agreement

Here is the question:

I recently came upon this sentence and, though I couldn't figure out why, it rubbed me wrong.

"Profound sadness, grief, and anger are normal reactions to an abnormal event."

My question is, should events be plural (because reactions are plural)? If it was just one emotion, it should read Grief is a normal reaction to an abnormal event. But it is a group of emotions, therefore plural. To me, the subject-verb don't seem to be in agreement.

The short answer is that this sentence is fine. The subject is the plural "Profound sadness, grief, and anger" and the verb is the plural "are." Don't be fooled by other elements in the sentence. You can have one or more reactions to a single event, so this is just peachy.

Criminal Sentence 474: Having a Dialogue with Subject-Verb Agreement

From a Web site:

"The dialogue he had as a child with his family capture the emotional truth if not the factual truth of what was said."

This sentence pairs a singular subject, "dialogue," with a plural verb, "capture." What's strange is that there's no plural noun to pair up with a plural verb. It's also strange that this sentence is rather nonsensical. Let's try to make sense of it:

"The dialogue he had with his family when he was a child captures the emotional truth--if not the factual truth--of what was said."

Ah.

Poll Results 111

Here was the question:

Correct or not? "More than anything else it has lead to an open mind."

Yes	12 (21%)
No	44 (78%)

Congrats to 78% of you!

The past participle we were looking for is "led"!

Criminal Sentence 473: Being Religious about Grammar

From an insert in today's paper:




What is the problem here? (ha ha)

Beware of a sentence that begins "As a..."; such a beginning introduces a characteristic of a person. For example, "As a mom, I have a lot of experience changing diapers."

You have to ensure that the person follows the "As" phrase, so here, "what" is the problem.

Criminal Sentence 472: Wearing Glasses

From a writing student of mine:

"He was in casual clothes wearing glasses."

Thanks, R., for being a good sport about this. That was a funny sentence! How did the clothes wear the glasses?

How about this less-funny version:

"He wore casual clothes and glasses."

Criminal Sentence 471: Fearing a Mistake

From a book about POWs in Vietnam:

"Fearing the worse, Dieter rushed over and cradled Duane in his arms."

The worst--with a T--is that only Dieter made it out alive.

Poll Results 110

Here was the question:

Is this right? "What we were discussing were the grounds on which he would make the motion."

Yes	14 (28%)
No	36 (72%)

A tough one. I had to look this up to be sure. Strange as it may seem, this sentence is correct. Pages 103-104 of the Grammar Desk Reference explain that the word "what" is not what the verb agrees with; rather, it's what comes later in the sentence. GDR gives these examples of correct sentences:

What is most essential is a clear explanation.
What are most essential are clear explanations.

Criminal Sentence 470: Comparing Typos

From a Web site:

"My answers is still the same as last year."

What do you get when you cross a typo with an incorrect comparison?

Hmmm.

This sentence!

Of course, the second word should be "answer"; the second mistake is just a comparison problem.

Consider this:

My shoes are the same as yours.

This sentence compares "shoes" to "yours" (meaning your shoes). Correct-a-mundo!

Now this: My answer is the same as last year.

This sentence compares "answer" to "last year." Oops. Let's fix-a-mundo:

My answer is the same as last year's.

Ah.

Hope you have a fun weekend burning off all the Halloween candy you ate.

P.S. What is a mundo, anyway!

Criminal Sentence 469: Two Spellings

From a Web site:

"The linked stories primarily circle out from two principle characters..."

One spelling: principle. Incorrect here.
The other: principal. Correct here.

Criminal Sentence 468: Reflections on a Reflexive

From a book I read:

"In attendance were myself and Maggie."

This is just a bad sentence. "Myself" is called a reflexive pronoun and it refers back to I: "I myself love candy," you might say, or "I gave myself a present." A reflexive pronoun doesn't stand alone.

If we fix the pronoun problem, we get "In attendance were Maggie and I."

Still a terrible sentence. Why not just say, "Maggie and I attended"?

Criminal Sentence 467: Show Me the Past Participle

From a book I read:

"But the photos the lieutenant had showed him ... were troubling."

Had showed? Now that's troubling!

Often, the past-tense verb and the past participle are the same, as in "heard": "I heard the bell"/"I have heard the bell." Other times, they're different, as in "ate" and "eaten."

The past tense of "to show" is "showed." The past participle is "shown."

Poll Results 109

The question:

Is this correct? "As the twins cab to the restaurant, they discuss the law suit."

Correct	22 (28%)
Incorrect	54 (71%)

Congrats to 71% of you. "Lawsuit" is one word.

Reader Question: Footsteps

Carrie wants to know this:

When you hear footsteps, do you hear "them" (footsteps) or "it" (the sound of footsteps)? Example: He heard them too; footsteps.)

Well, footsteps is plural, so you would use them; sound is singular, so you would use it:

He heard them too: footsteps. (I would say a colon, not a semicolon, is better there.)
He heard it too: the sound of footsteps.
Footsteps: He heard them too.
The sound of footsteps: He heard it too.

Reader Question: Compounding's

Here is the conundrum:

There is a heading on a page that reads, "Compounding's powerful effects."

Compounding is a verb and appears in lots of financial text, but can this word be possessive?

Answer: In this case, "compounding" is used as a noun. You could turn this around and say, "the powerful effects of compounding."

Criminal Sentence 466: Typing Trouble

From a Web site:

"When we asked Jamie Lee's publicistf or comment..."

Que?

Let's keep our eyes on the words we're typing. This reminds me of a piece of junk mail I got once. It was addressed, cryptically, to Npmmor Ytrmhs. The typist was one letter off for each letter of my name!

Criminal Sentence 465: Think about That Comma

From a blog post:

"Think about it, it happens to many of us when it comes to doing jobs we love."

Think about it. Period. A period--not a comma--separates thoughts like this.

Grammar Girl explains comma splices here.

Poll Results 108

Here was the question:

Did you miss me while I was in Hawaii?

Yes!	21 (63%)
No!	12 (36%)

So you didn't miss me so much. Waaaaaaah!

Criminal Sentence 464: Peeved Typo

From an online comment:

"a pet peeve of mind"

Oops! That would be a pet peeve of mine!

Criminal Sentence 463: Speed in a Lighter Color

From a comment on my Amazon page:

"The order came with lightening speed!"

No bottle blonds here!

Criminal Sentence 462: Painful Sentence

From a book I'm reading (describing childbirth):

"It felt like a vice gripping my stomach."

When I see the word "vice," I think smoking or some other evil thing, not a metal pinching device!

I did look it up, and "vice" is listed as an alternate to "vise," but why use "vice" when a perfectly good "vise" is waiting?

Criminal Sentence 461: Spelling Check

Although I was on vacation, I had to look for typos whenever I wasn't in the ocean. I know it's not the clearest, but at the very bottom, it says, "Repairs and saftey check."