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Thursday, November 18, 2010

Criminal Sentence 475: Which Noun?

From junk mail I received:

"You currently have a $30 credit towards this service which expires 12/31/10."

Question: Does the credit or the service expire at the end of the year?


ChildsPlay said...

Is there a way to get all of the information in a single sentence and make it clearer?

Anonymous said...

Ugh. This is why I hate seeing the date formatted this way. Logically, you might say that the credit expires at the end of the year.

But you can also argue that it expires on October 31, 2012...or 1912, or 1812, etc.

The Sentence Sleuth said...

Of course, CP: "Your $30 credit toward this service expires on 12/31/10." Much less wordy, too, wouldn't you say?