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What's wrong with this? "With enough money, we could buy a new van, instead of repairing the one that was seven years old with spit and glue."
Punctuation 36 (46%)
Grammar 31 (39%)
Spelling 0 (0%)
Wordiness 11 (14%)
Congratulations, 39% of you. The phrase "with spit and glue" doesn't belong next with "that was seven years old." In this case, you can't just move the phrase; you have to change the wording slightly:
"With enough money, we could buy a new van, instead of using spit and glue to repair the one that was seven years old."
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