From a book I read:
"But sitting in the vinyl chair of a waiting room, the settling dust of my family’s collapse seemed unimportant."
I suppose dust could sit in a vinyl chair, but the writer ("I," most likely) is probably sitting there. I like the way that "the settling dust of my family's collapse" sounds, but it's in the wrong place. Here's a rewrite:
"But sitting in the vinyl chair of a waiting room, I realized that the settling dust of my family’s collapse was unimportant."
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