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Tuesday, June 7, 2011

Poll Results 137

Here was the question:

What is wrong with this headline? "Terrifying videos emerge of deadly tornado"

Absolutely nothing!
12 (16%)
Word order
46 (61%)
Noun choice
2 (2%)
Adjective choice
3 (4%)
Verb choice
12 (16%)

Well, I take issue with the word order. The prepositional phrase "of deadly tornado" goes with "videos," but it is next to "emerge." It would be much better to write "Terrifying videos of deadly tornado emerge"

Ah. That word order is no longer terrifying!

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