From an online Q&A with an agent:
"What's something you've sold that comes out soon that you're excited about?"
This sentence piles on the "that" clauses: two are easy to see but one is hiding.
The obvious ones are "that comes out soon" and "that you're excited about." The hidden one is "you've sold" (just add an imaginary "that" before it: "...something that you've sold...").
You can't have three clauses modifying one noun/pronoun, "something" in this case.
It's an awkward mouthful, so let's rewrite it:
"Which of your recent sales comes out soon and makes you excited about its debut?"
This isn't perfect so if anyone wants to try, please go ahead!
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