From a book I am reading (with British spelling):
"Compared to the cheap travelling clothes of these passengers, he was quite the dandy."
This sentence compares "cheap clothes" to "he." Uh-oh.
Here's a better version:
"He was quite the dandy compared to these cheaply clothed passengers."
The sentence makes the writer!
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Possibly trying to keep the style of the author (ending the sentence with the declaration that he was a dandy), I would try something like this:
Compared to the passengers, who were wearing cheap travelling clothes, he was quite the dandy.
How’s that??
BTW which word is Brit-spelled? I can’t always remember which words are different in the two Englishes
I like your rewrite. The British spelling is "travelling." Americans use one "L."
How about this one?
Compared to the passengers in their cheap traveling clothes, he was quite the dandy.
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