From a book I'm reading:
"After the introduction, he walked up to the stage, a small man, trim and owlish."
I object to where the writer placed the description of the man. "A small man, trim and owlish" sits next to "the stage," and it clearly does not describe that. Let's get the real estate right:
"After the introduction, the small man, trim and owlish, walked up to the stage."
Ah, much better.
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