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Tuesday, April 20, 2010

Criminal Sentence 375: Rewriting History

From a notice from my cable company regarding the program "The Tudors." These sentences concern Henry VIII, who married six women. Here are two sentences of background before the error:

"When his first wife, Katherine of Aragon, is unable to give birth to a son, Henry seeks a divorce--which the Catholic Church refuses to grant him. As a result, Henry severs England's ties from Rome, and severs many heads in the process!"

Now for the mistake:

"He then remarries the beautiful Anne Boleyn."

This bad sentence suggests that Henry had already married Anne. He married each wife only once. The writer should have written something like this:

"He then gets married again, this time to the beautiful Anne Boleyn."


Gordon Bennet said...

I think "severs ties from Rome" is also bad. You can sever a head from a body; they are attached (tied together) by a neck. But in the case of England and the Roman Church it was the ties WITH Rome that were severed, severing the England Church FROM Rome.

The Sentence Sleuth said...

Sounds good to me!
Thanks for pointing it out!