From a book I read recently:
"Sitting in the snow, the tree before him seemed tall and it seemed to lean toward him."
I suppose trees can sit, but I think the character was the one getting a cold rear end. It's just a quick fix: "As he sat in the snow, the tree..."
I would also like to harp about the unnecessary repetition of the word "seemed."
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