From a book I'm reading:
"It was that secretive quality that drew her to him in the first place, why deny it?"
This is an example of two sentences smushed into one.
Sentence 1: "It was that secretive quality that drew her to him in the first place."
Sentence 2: "Why deny it?"
You can't just put a comma wherever you want, there are things called periods, they separate sentences. (Ooh, that was painful--using incorrect punctuation!!)
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I suggest these three rewrites: It was that secretive quality that drew her to him in the first place. Why deny it?
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It was that secretive quality that drew her to him in the first place - why deny it?
or
It was that secretive quality that drew her to him in the first place: why deny it?
Am I right?
I like the em dash the best (your second), but all are better than a comma!
Merci.
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