1)
Here's a sentence from an LA Times article dated September 21:
A law enforcement investigation tracked a delivery of potent marijuana from Northern California to a home in Kentucky where two NFL players were at when the package arrived, according to a report by California Watch.
The yellow highlighting is mine. "Were at" is my question. It sounds bad and I would rephrase it, but is there a rule against using this construction? Do you need the word at?
You definitely don't need the word "at."
2)
Dear Bonnie,
I couldn't resist sending you this second sentence by another LA Times reporter:
Three Covina men are behind bars after they allegedly stole a 30-pack of Tecate beer from a market and attempted to escape but crashed a car and hit an employee who chased them, then one ran through a car wash and another left behind his ID.
What's wrong with the LA Times?
Good question, Stephanie!! That sentence is a disaster!
2 comments:
The second "sentence" has so much crammed into it that it resembles a tweet. Due to its length (241 chars > 140 char limit), though, it even fails at that!
Agreed, spugbrap. (Interesting name you've got there!)
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