From a book I'm reading:
"Dressed only in a t-shirt and panties, he then dragged her to his car."
I did a double take on that one.
Let's fix it:
"Dressed only in a t-shirt and panties, she was then dragged to his car."
I don't usually advocate using passive, but this seems to me the best way to fix it so there's no suggestion he was wearing panties.
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