From a novel I read (set in the 16th century):
"Clad only in his trunk hose and loose-fitting linen shirt, his sleeves were shoved up to the elbows."
Hmm.
Is it only me, or do you ever find yourself reading a book and feel it necessary to write down an incorrect sentence?
Anyway, "his sleeves" were not clad in those two items!
Since I've pointed out many misplaced modifiers already, I think you guys should work on rewriting it.
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"Clad only in his trunk hose and loose-fitting linen shirt with sleeves shoved up to his elbows, he stalked across the room."
Clad only in his trunk hose and loose-fitting linen shirt, he shoved his sleeves up to the elbows.
Great job!
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