Here was the rewriting challenge:
"As a product marketing manager, keeping a pulse on what the competition is doing is critical."
Congratulations to winner Ginny Baird, who created this succinct sentence:
A product marketing manager keeps a pulse on the competition.
She wins a free copy of The Curious Case of the Misplaced Modifier by Moi and The Grammar Devotional by Mignon Fogarty.
The two runners-up are Heather Swarthout and David Wolf, who each win a free copy of The Curious Case of the Misplaced Modifier by Moi.
Thanks to everyone who entered the contest.
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