I don't usually do two Criminal Sentences in one day, but this is so awful I couldn't wait. From a writing magazine:
"This month's installment, for example, spotlights So and So, the award-winning novelist and writer for young readers who passed away last fall."
Yikes! The young readers passed away?
Oops. The writer meant that the award winner has died. Too much is crammed in here, so let's bury this sentence and resurrect a new one:
"This month's installment, for example, spotlights So and So, an award-winning novelist and writer for young readers. Sadly, the author passed away last fall."
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