From a column in my local paper:
"It seems that since moving here from another state that all of my sterling silver jewelry tarnishes very quickly."
There are actually two errors here. The first is the repetition of the word "that." You need just one.
The second mistake is a misplaced modifier, because this sentence suggests that the jewelry moved here from another state. Obviously, the jewelry moved here but a person brought it. The sentence would be better like this:
"It seems since I moved here from another state that all of my sterling silver jewelry tarnishes very quickly."
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