From a book I am reading:
"All I had was a vague recollection of a man with slicked-down hair and a little Latin mustache who was always cheerful."
Wow, a cheerful mustache. That's entertaining prose. Again, as usual, I am pointing out a misplaced modifier. The clause "who was always cheerful" doesn't belong next to "mustache"; it belongs with "a man." Just move "cheerful" before "man" and your problem is solved:
"All I had was a vague recollection of an always cheerful man with slicked-down hair and a little Latin mustache."
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