From a book I finished last week:
"The man watched him and the girl with slow eyes."
This sentence displays another pesky prepositional phrase: "with slow eyes." Currently, it's next to "the girl," but does the girl have slow eyes? Nope, from the context of the paragraph, the man watched her slowly. So it should be:
"With slow eyes, the man watched him and the girl."
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