From something I edited recently:
"She made a careful selection of the fabric's color."
There's nothing grammatically wrong with this sentence, but it's just a tad too wordy for my tastes. What is wordy? Wordy is using more words than you need.
Compare it to this:
"She carefully selected the fabric's color."
Six instead of nine words there.
This poor sentence uses what I often rail against: a nominalization. Nominalizations often omit who is doing the action:
"The selection of the fabric was necessary."
Who selected the fabric?
The usage of (hint hint) of nominalizations by everyone must stop! (Please.)
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Wednesday, October 1, 2008
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