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Friday, July 11, 2008

Criminal Sentence 54: Who's Unconscious?

Overheard on a forensics show:

"Once unconscious, he hit her head on the floor."

This was a very sad story of a man who murdered his wife. If this sentence were not part of such a terrible crime, I might laugh. This misplaced modifier suggests that the man was unconscious while he hit her. That would be hard to do. The narrator unfortunately meant that the woman was unconscious. He meant to say, "Once she was unconscious, he hit her head."

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