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Thursday, December 15, 2011

Reader Question: Marc and Jennifer

A question from Stephanie:

This one from Us Magazine online has me puzzled.

Marc Anthony is up in arms that his ex Jennifer Lopez has moved on since their July split with a much younger man.

Read more: http://www.usmagazine.com/celebrity-news/news/marc-anthony-throws-tantrum-over-jennifer-lopezs-new-beau-20111412#ixzz1gXBPb8OQ

What's the best place for "since their July split"?

Marc Anthony is up in arms that, since their July split, his ex Jennifer Lopez has moved on with a much younger man.

or maybe

Marc Anthony is up in arms that his ex Jennifer Lopez has moved on with a much younger man.

Do Marc and Jennifer deserve this much sentence parsing?

I know the answer. You?
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The Sentence Sleuth said...

Well, Stephanie is right that this is not a good sentence. I like this rewrite she offered (with the addition of commas): "Marc Anthony is up in arms that his ex, Jennifer Lopez, has moved on with a much younger man."

December 16, 2011 at 9:52 AM

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