From something I edited recently:
"At the top [of the trail] you'll want to stop for a drink, some snacks, and to take in the incredible view."
Sounds like a lovely hike, but it's not a parallel sentence. I did a double take near the end of the sentence because unparallel sentences throw the reader off. These are the elements that need to be parallel but aren't:
to stop for a drink
to take in the incredible view
So we need to use three "to + verb" constructions (infinitives) or some other parallel format. I pick infinitives.
"At the top [of the trail] you'll want to stop for a drink and some snacks, and to take in the incredible view."
Now this is an incredible sentence to go along with the view.
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