The Phoenix area is home to a serial shooter, who has killed seven people. I hope they catch him pronto! This criminal sentence comes from an article about this criminal:
"The thread police say links the nine incidents to one another is forensics."
When I first read this sentence I asked myself what the thread police are.
It turns out that this sentence needs a strategically placed "that":
"The thread that police say links the nine incidents to one another is forensics."
Even better would be to eliminate the "to be" verb and more wordiness:
"Police say that forensics links the nine incidents."
By the way, I wondered whether "forensics" is singular or plural. When the word refers to the discipline of forensics, it is singular.
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