From something I'm editing (about how to create an effective review site):
"Reading actual comments from past customers, good and bad, can be the most influential component on a review site."
The problem here is the "good and bad" phrase. It is supposed to modify "comments" but it sits next to "customers." Perhaps the customers are good; perhaps they are bad. But the writer didn't mean to talk about their character. Let's move the phrase to the right place:
"Reading actual comments, good and bad, from past customers can be the most influential component on a review site."
I might even like to change the commas to em dashes--to make what I'm saying more prominent:
"Reading actual comments--good and bad--from past customers can be the most influential component on a review site."
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