From a brochure I got in the mail yesterday:
"As a loyal Get More Rewards member, we wanted to thank you with a few discounts to some local retailers."
Thanks, but your grammar stinks!
Who is a member? Not "we." Let's match things up better:
We wanted to thank you for being a loyal Get More Rewards member, so here are a few discounts to some local retailers.
If you wanted to keep the "As" at the beginning, it would have to be something like this:
As a loyal Get More Rewards member, you deserve some discounts.
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