Tuesday, September 16, 2008

Criminal Sentence 92: How Many Ways?

From something I recently edited (about planning a wedding):

"An easy way to express yourself is through the music used during the ceremony and reception, table décor, or favors."

This sentence starts "An easy way" but then provides three ways. I often see sentences that mention a number of things but then the actual number of things discussed in the sentence is different. So this sentence would sound better this way:

"Three easy ways to express yourself are through the music used during the ceremony and reception, the table décor you choose, and the favors you give out."

Be sure to count how many things you're talking about in your sentence.

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