Thursday, January 6, 2011

Criminal Sentence 491: Frequent Error

From today's newspaper (about Southwest's new frequent-flier program):

"Cashing in an award will become drastically different under the new program and will look more similar to other airlines' programs."

What exactly is this sentence comparing?

Cashing in an award

will look more similar to

other airlines' programs

Let's just scrap this icky sentence. Anyone want to try to rewrite it?

2 comments:

  1. Under the new program, cashing in an award will become drastically different; the restrictions will be similar to those imposed by other airlines.

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